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Zanzibar (Free verse) by sunfloweronfire

Coconut husks Fading moonlight Shimmering sands An Arab boy's kite Tropical shells Sweet sugar cane Women in veils Curious cranes Spices and sounds Scents untold Cardamon and Cloves Bought and sold Memories so sweet Poems to pour Like this little one About Zanzibar shore

nentwined 24-Aug-02/4:01 PM
I didn't like the line "curious cranes" rhyming with "sweet sugar cane". and the self-reference was a bit much.




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