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Broken (Free verse) by psychedelic

It's raining men Droplets stream down my face Like tears from the sky The rain stopped I'm soaked And chilled to the bone My heart's numb I feel dumb And I can't find warmth anymore.

darylchew 28-Aug-04/2:00 AM
feelings of depression. the hardened heart cant allow warmth in anymore. after a breakup i suppose. nice. although the rhyming here "My heart's numb
I feel dumb" is....a little forced maybe.




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