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Currents (Free verse) by Isis

Drawn in to a deep of tear, Struggling, I die. Execute by yielding, My oppressor is the sky The fiendish sun Throws waves of bright, Vertically down into the depths. Dark and light, adjacent stand Shadows glance, and terrify, Bind me to my fate.

god'swife 24-Aug-02/12:22 AM
Morituri te salutamus. I'm certain into is a single word, not 2 separate, I looked it up for you just to be sure. Is the sun fiendish? I suppose it is fiendish to watch and do nothing. The sun, to my mind, would throw beams of bright or make waves go bright. But the sun throwing waves is hard for my particular brain to accept. These are unimportant observations, but they did come to me. Take them with a grain of salt. Otherwise ne plus ultra. I've spent a lot of time underwater. You've got the scenery right. 10




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