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A Rally (Free verse) by hobojo

I sat in a crowd, all alone I sat in a cloud and looked down on his throne The people, they roared applause all around I made the motions empty hearted no doubt Why must I continue to believe I'm alone lacking the courage to seek others out Surely they're shared the beliefs which I hold I can't be the only bulging out of this mold

Dovina 10-Aug-04/11:28 AM
"looked down on his throne" is thrown from the middle ages and a great line. "Surely they're shared" is not, try they've. Overall, an inspiring thought.




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