poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on OLD AGE BLUES by massangel62.

unknown^user9 Aug 2004

"being ate"? You push those verb conjugations far enough and they'll scream at ya.
Rambling, and the ending is just plain cheesy. Plus, the rhyming is so rigid that there's no room for the rhythm to get off, but it still does.
Sorry.