Replying to a comment on:

Solid Understanding (Free verse) by Dovina

My words splatter like grease the simplest puzzle eludes I mimic old sayings none of it true. At such an intimate moment please don’t cast your eyes or change expression I fear if you do it’s immediately lost.

Dan garcia-Black 6-Aug-04/8:10 AM
The inimate moment is lost not only the expression? If that is the meaning then the 2nd verse could use a bit o' rewrite. At this public moment -8-




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001