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Solid Understanding
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Free verse
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Dovina
My words splatter like grease the simplest puzzle eludes I mimic old sayings none of it true. At such an intimate moment please donât cast your eyes or change expression I fear if you do itâs immediately lost.
Dan garcia-Black
6-Aug-04/8:10 AM
The inimate moment is lost not only the expression? If that is the meaning then the 2nd verse could use a bit o' rewrite. At this public moment -8-
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