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Solid Understanding (Free verse) by Dovina

My words splatter like grease the simplest puzzle eludes I mimic old sayings none of it true. At such an intimate moment please don’t cast your eyes or change expression I fear if you do it’s immediately lost.

richa 6-Aug-04/6:34 AM
1) 'simplest'
2) mimic and parrot mean the same thing
3) Not sure the second verse follows on so well from 'non of it true'
4) If someone changes expression it is immediately lost, that is a truism not a fear.




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