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Summer crush (Lyric) by sk8rs_rule_all

Summer crushs really suck ass, I should of known better than to get so close, so fast... We talked for hours at a time, Now i dont think that i'll be fine. You made me laugh, You made me cry, I've never fallen this hard for a guy. I'll really miss you, thats all i can say, Everything else just seems so cliche. A stupid love song is what this is, Only for you and no one else. I dont usually let myself fall this hard; Instead i acted like a retard. I'll miss you lots, i'll miss you so much, Lets get together soon and do lunch. Summer crushs really suck ass, I should of known better than to get so close, so fast... We laughed at people on the street, Talked about when we would meet. My heart is yours for eternity, Now isn't that quite nifty? You have no idea what an impact you've had on me, And now i guess you'll never see. Im quite sad, you can tell, You caught me, everytime i fell. Summer crushs really suck ass, I should of known better than to get so close, so fast... I'll get better though, you know i will. A stupid love song is written for you, You better appreciate it, and soak up every bit, Because summer crushs really suck ass.

unknown^user 3-Aug-04/10:10 AM
The juvenile innocence conveyed by the writing is definitely cute and amplifies the subject matter. The blaring spelling errors though are just a little too much to give it that Toys r' Us backwards R quality which may have made it too juvenile anyway.




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