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The American Soldier (Sonnet) by x0lovelylarnx0

A soldier goes off to war He hopes he's coming back He sits and waits for more On his way out he carries a sack Hopes he never has to see a friend die He preys to God he won't have to fire He can't sleep or lie He listens to every command from his sire Thank god for all our troops They are giving up months of their life When they could be shooting hoops Instead they signed up for a fight He gets off his boat When he saw his family he found hope

Sasha 24-Jul-04/4:29 PM
Rhymes are off, iambic pentameter is not there, and the sire.fire rhyme is forced, as are they all.

This is actually a pretty good specimen of the crap that happens when young'uns like you think they can be profound.

-blessed with a 2-


Really, I'm being hard on you because I am expressing an honest opinion, not because I'm retaliating.




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