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Respect on a Quiet Hillside (Free verse) by Dovina

Under stars Blanket spread At midnight On her grandparents’ grave They did it Quietly In remembrance

INTRANSIT 24-Jul-04/3:05 PM
They did "it"? I think I get this but, I think it can be done better. Lines one and two are kind of telling, and for my own edification, why grandmums?




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