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Wind (Free verse) by Dovina

Driven against its will, The lonesome wind, Searching, despairing, Waves on the desert Waves on the sea, Surf beating uninhabited shore, Many voices in the wind, Heavy clouds, Cold as death, Promising as life.

Dovina 13-Jul-04/1:59 PM
Thanks for your comments. I put the 'as's in the last two lines to show comparison rather than cause and effect, either way could work though. The first line switch might work, hmmmm.




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