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Wind (Free verse) by Dovina

Driven against its will, The lonesome wind, Searching, despairing, Waves on the desert Waves on the sea, Surf beating uninhabited shore, Many voices in the wind, Heavy clouds, Cold as death, Promising as life.

god'swife 13-Jul-04/1:49 PM
Do you need the 'as' in the last line? When I read this my mind automatically left it out. The second sentence might work better as the first.

The lonesome wind driven
against its will;
...




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