Poemranker [Replying] Thu Nov 21 15:37:41 PST 2024

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After all the dieting, Makeup, Fashion, Poise, He finally noticed.

11-Jul-04/11:16 AM

I'm not sure why, but I can't help from being critical of this poem. First, the word "all" in line 1 is troubling. Is this meant to imply that, after he noticed, there will be no more dieting, etc.? In this sense, the poem is about a woman who lets herself go after she couples up. In the last line, the word "finally" raises questions. What did he notice, that she exists? Or that she's been dieting, etc.? If it's the latter, what was noticed? That she looks good or that she's too skinny and wears too much makeup? Ambiguity is good in moderation, but this poem seems too ambiguous to possess meaning.

If this poem is autobiographical, congratulations on getting noticed. I'm sure you look fabulous.

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