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Veracious Flames (Free verse) by Evening

The shadows can be anything I want, but truth remains The flames a hot breath, but they burn just the same and the fragments of bliss which were shared could be the whole But the memories will not recede, though now the evidence fades away And inevitably, unsaid and undone haunt again Though the opportunity is forever lost I decide to carry the heavy urn and spread the ashes among the young, growing trees

Shuushin 2-Jul-04/5:23 AM
you could almost remove the first word of every line and the thing would be better for it.

I like this one.




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