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Its raining (Free verse) by caitydee

Its raining again I knew it would Fat droplets stain my cheeks Marking my face Its raining again Always this time of year The seasons revolt and bring the rain That washes over me The rain storms Today I cannot withstand its force Take my boyfriend My friends and my comfort away And then expect me to stand I am paralyzed-it engulfs me Why can’t you hold me? Tell me what to do And I’ll smile though my tears

SupremeDreamer 19-Jun-04/12:09 AM
Over-all, the rain theme isn't very strong, and the ending didn't help that much at all-- reminded me of something that would be penned by a highschool girlie.

Blessed with six.




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