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Origins (Free verse) by Doug

And now comes past, with his new squaw forgotten, to consummate their raven joining in the newly - wed suite of was. And they'll forge a powdered shadow, while knotted in their mishapened need, soon giving life to an abstraction, And they'll call it Christ. And now comes rhythm , beside her new groom profound, to consecrate their listless union, in the warm retreat of always and glad, And they'll suppose a subtle light, in that instant of tremor and faint intrigue, soon giving birth to an expectant splendor - And we'll call it charisma.

Shuushin 18-Jun-04/4:24 AM
The only complaint I have, and its more of an observation - is that the players seem somewhat arbitary.

I mean why not "Desperation" or "Futility" or "Esctacy" (etc.)?

The title alone doesn't serve well enough to establish the setting.




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