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Thin Blood (Lyric) by Rodavlas

I'm planning to thin-out my blood tonight I'm taking some pills with cheap red wine Black and White photos of your blue eyes Head in my hands cause you used to be mine I'm shaking sweaty chills tonight Twisitng in bed, doing lefts and rights Take another swig of my Miller Lite I'm planning to thin-out my blood tonight. (chorus) Take a blade to my arms Slice the viens in my thighs Take a knife to the heart Take a bullet to the brain To my arms, to my thighs, to my heart.

Shuushin 15-Jun-04/10:19 AM
take the second half of the second verse and put the rest back into the word-pile.

And the last line could work too - just the idea of it; toasting bodyparts.

could make a memorable song - but not another suicide note.




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