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Bugs (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

I don't mind so much when insects explode on my windshield. So colorful these small Picassos Thin green wings splay over a jealous yellow blur shimmery silver plays on a fluid blue signature. The way humans die is not so vivid. Slowly browning and wilting. Inside, a monochrome.

INTRANSIT 9-Jun-04/4:28 PM
Sorry you're not happy with it, and I don't want to explain it away. It took me four days of look-adjust-forget, to get it,here.
You are correct about the transparency thing, and a doll for taking the time. Nice to see you again Mrs. G.




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