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In Love as in Love (Free verse) by Everyone

I touch your hand and the electricity begins Its high voltage and runs up and down my spine You place a kiss on my lips and my head spins Holding you in my arms, I'm so glad you're mine Your hair is long, shining, and smells of love My hands love to roam through the golden tresses Getting lost in your soul and the stars above I can't get enough of your passionate caresses When the kissing turns serious I swear our souls Entwine and float far out into the atmosphere My heart beats very fast, and body is as hot coals It's so romantic as we hold each other near No words are needed as we communicate our feelings Through our tender touches and glazed over eyes The sensuality is overwhelming, your love brings The most delicious emotions and heartfelt sighs Our love for each other is relayed in our clinch We want to stay wrapped in each others arms always I've never felt such passion before, that's a cinch You bring excitement to all my nights and days

Shuushin 27-May-04/7:43 AM
Ahhh - the list lengthens. Impressive.

I'm glad someone is keeping track of these things.

As for this particular poem[e]- is not 'orrible. Its not a poet's poem[e], reads more like something to be given to the boyfriend/girlfriend (I suspect girlfriend) - it's more like a "Poem" in the hallmark sense.

Some of those rhymes (other than the love/above) bit are clumsy - but love has that effect.

I always feel silly rating a poem[e] by Everyone, but I'll give it a generous 8.




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