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EGG (Sonnet) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?

Egg, Egg, Egg, Egg, Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeegggggggggggg!

edpeterson 13-May-04/6:05 AM
I think it becomes a little redundant, oblong as it were toward the end. I like the first stanza. But from there is seems to drag a little. the ending is powerful but it feels a trifle long.

i would take an e or 2 out of the final line, and perhaps add a bit more repetition to the middle.




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