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Bracelets In A Box (Free verse) by cuddlytiger17

As each night slowly fades away And turns into another weary day I still find myself thinking of you And everything we’ve been through I remember the ecstasy of your laugh The gentleness in your eyes And the truth in your lies I recall just how peaceful you made me feel And how what we had felt so real But as time and distance became our enemy We were forced to say farewell And leave fate the power to tell With hearing the clock’s tick-tocks I recollect memories of you And bracelets in a box.

Sasha 12-May-04/12:44 PM
In either sense, this poem fails to evoke any emotion from me at all. While it may have been written during an emotional momen, and while the author may have tried to make it contain emotions, I think that it doesn't. That's my honest opinion, sorry. And anyway, when did you get the moral weight to talk about what's immature? I would take a look at some of your own comments before telling other people about their maturity level.




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