<~>10 May 2004

nothing lewd here, zodiac. can't you make L1 of S2 work with the sounds of this bit:
' our clothing/
skimmed like curd, when the soothing '

this is so lovely to the ear.

and, up-ending the water jug' does not work as well for sound--but visually, that is one hell of an image.

i like this revision!