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Bracelets In A Box (Free verse) by cuddlytiger17

As each night slowly fades away And turns into another weary day I still find myself thinking of you And everything we’ve been through I remember the ecstasy of your laugh The gentleness in your eyes And the truth in your lies I recall just how peaceful you made me feel And how what we had felt so real But as time and distance became our enemy We were forced to say farewell And leave fate the power to tell With hearing the clock’s tick-tocks I recollect memories of you And bracelets in a box.

Sasha 10-May-04/1:07 PM
Ann, you might want to try writing poems on a subject other than lost love. Teen romance is overdone by so many and in such a mediocre manner that it has become an automatic cliché.

I'm giving you fair warning: Many other people on this site will be very impolite in telling you what they think of poems like this.




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