Replying to a comment on:

California triolets (Triolet) by zodiac

We went in and out of vast blue shadows, dog tired on a Sunday morning on an endless ribbony road in Nevada – we went in and out of vast blue shadows. I remember I thought how the clouds would gather and break before we reached California, as we went in and out of those vast blue shadows, dog tired on a Sunday morning. I smoked out the window and she read Lawrence and sipped from a bottle of Chivas with a kind of beautiful, drowsy assurance – I smoked out the window and she read Lawrence; while the storm stacked up in the West, and torrents circled around to receive us – I smoked out the window; she read her Lawrence and sipped from a bottle of Chivas.

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 7-May-04/7:26 AM
If she really was reading Lawrence, then "assurance" is bow'ls because you only chose it to rhyme with what she happened to be reading. But if she wasn't reading Lawrence, then the whole poeme is UTTERLY MORALLY BANKRUPT.




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001