Replying to a comment on:

I Find Myself Standing (Free verse) by Aetius

on a rope-bridge of hope across the chasm which grew between us on the day when I stopped writing. He laughed when I told him I was done. He disbelieved. Doubted. And now, I find myself mid-span. You'll see that I hold a pen. Again. And I just can't drop it. Maybe he was right.

<~> 4-May-04/10:42 AM
so many pronouns!

wean them away for a more concise image, and give me a little less narrative and a little more of why you stopped, and, having stopped, chose to then cross that wobbly span clutching that now-impotent pen?




Track and Plan your submissions ; Read some Comics ; Get Paid for your Poetry
PoemRanker Copyright © 2001 - 2024 - kaolin fire - All Rights Reserved
All poems Copyright © their respective authors
An internet tradition since June 9, 2001