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Shame (Free verse) by Joe-joe

Shame is my best friend. For when I stand at its edge And it casts its dark shadow upon me I know that You are near. That cold and damp chill fills me. And I am frozen with fear For I know my next step may be my last - And that the time we’ve spent together May have been for no good cause. But You bring that darkness upon me And rescue me time and again As shame has laid a path to Your door And I who live blindly in the shadows Move ever closer to Your Light.

edpeterson 3-May-04/3:38 PM
I think it is pretty fucking good. I like the way you cast shame in a postitive light. Though, frozen with fear, and the religious overtones detract. but what the fuck do I know? Nothing. ANd yet i wield a vote as sharp as any other....aint democracy grand?




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