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Natural Remedy (Free verse) by richa

Mint and witch hazel cures most things short of an illness. A sprig and a branch a half-thumb deep in hand-turned soils grown to its limits. To prune, pestle to taste if needs be.

Shuushin 3-May-04/1:26 PM
The word "can" just irks me. Given your propensity toward an economy of words you could easily just loose "can" and put an s on "cure[s]" - does it hurt the meter then? I don't think so; up to you.

For some reason I read this as an Amish person might - and it cracks me up. Actually it has a comedic feel because this concoction sounds useless; it has all these disclaimers and ways for it to be messed up.

In some,
most things - short of illness,
as long as the soil is hand-turned, specific planting depth, frequent watering, etc...

So, I'm going with that you did this effect on purpose and I give you a nine for now (until you change it, because you will - and there's not a thing wrong with doing that).




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