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Black Belt (Free verse) by etherealmaiden

Homework to do Grades to get I must be perfect Tighten the Belt Roommate troubles Feeling left out I must try harder Tighten the Belt Room is a mess Parents are mad I must clean up Tighten the Belt Friends are gone Relationships lost I must find a way Tighten the Belt Couples all around Love in the air I must get a man Tighten the Belt Eating less food Reflection looks worse I must lose weight Tighten the Belt Everything's wrong Never good enough I must get it right Failing to breathe Spiraling thoughts I am in heaven One more notch

richa 3-May-04/1:01 PM
I agree with nowhereman. This poeme shouts anorexia nervosa.

I get a sense of anorexogenic environment (the expectations) and an anorexic mindset (the repetition of tighten the belt and the disordered nature of the poem as it draws in all its threads).




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