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bitch on the triple word score (Free verse) by middenHeap
relax. don't make another mountain just so you can play on the dangerous precipices. you asked me to play so I'm playing! look--the moon is looking in on our disarray and she's getting pissed off-- so don’t shout so loud or she'll break in our windows. relax, drink your wine. I'll take back that word and spell another. look--I can spell witch, it scores even higher. save the fat-bellied letter for better times for beer and belly laughs and your sweet, sweet body baby. whoah, slow down don’t throw that--I’m warning you! ahh, shit that’s my favourite shirt you’ve gone and ruined. huh-what?? shut up and give me five tiles, bitch.

Up the ladder: Angel
Down the ladder: when i make sculpture

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3
Weighted score: 5.65
Overall Rank: 2125
Posted: January 25, 2004 2:38 PM PST; Last modified: January 25, 2004 2:38 PM PST
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[9] zodiac @ 67.240.155.218 | 25-Jan-04/3:14 PM | Reply
It would be even better with a bunch of seven-letter words starting with Qu or X. No, I can't think of any myself right now.
[n/a] middenHeap @ 217.82.11.166 > zodiac | 25-Jan-04/3:19 PM | Reply
mmmm, and I just realized it makes no sense for him to be getting 5 tiles. I should change it to "my tiles".
[10] Shardik @ 24.126.116.54 | 26-Jan-04/3:00 PM | Reply
If you soak a pretzel in urine for five hours it will swell and taste nasty.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > Shardik | 26-Jan-04/3:15 PM | Reply
I think swellings are nature's most beautiful gifts. To leave an innocent object in a pool of unsavoury liquid, and come back to find it bloated, pregnant with an unnameable sourness, is to commune with Christ, to experience true peace.
[9] zodiac @ 152.30.88.96 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 26-Jan-04/3:19 PM | Reply
It's a kind of transubstantiation. And an immaculate conception (of sourness).
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