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Dizzy (Free verse) by phbiscuit
Make yourself spin around Until you are dizzy And the stars wheel overhead And watch them burn the tree As your heart thumps Like a wardrum While they huddle around the fire Laghing about silly things Rubbing their gloved hands together They'll spin and spin While your eyes are unable to focus on Any single one of them And that's when your heart Will really begin to race When you realize there is not A single one that cares to ask Why your eyes are jumping I, on the other hand, will watch calmly My heart thumps as any heart should thump With a smooth and steady rhythm no matter the circumstance

Up the ladder: Kildare, 12-11-03
Down the ladder: Now and Memory

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7965
Posted: January 2, 2004 4:57 PM PST; Last modified: January 2, 2004 4:57 PM PST
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[8] lastobelus @ 217.226.20.245 | 2-Jan-04/5:40 PM | Reply
I liked this one too. It's also whimsical, like deadweight, but less gothic.

I really am a sucker for whimsy. check out my pome Taller Girl, it has a spinning girl in it too. Assuming your spinner is a girl. Woman. Female. Person. You know.
[n/a] phbiscuit @ 68.62.146.155 > lastobelus | 2-Jan-04/5:45 PM | Reply
whimsy is fun...and yeah, it's a girl
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