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Use Me (Lyric) by dragonfly
You tried to undermine me Painted a picture of an oversimplified me But you couldn't quite discern me And you found that to be threatening So you took it upon yourself to teach me a lesson or two Baby made me see I was such a fool To think I deserved much more than my plate had been served Oh, I was such a fool, but you saved me from becoming a disgrace And now I know my rightful place So baby use me, 'cause using me will help me to save face It took being brought down to my knees To ascertain what is good for me I was riding on a high wave I didn't know I needed to be saved Until you took the liberty to teach me a lesson or two Darling made me see I was such a fool To think I'm entitled to much more than I was provided Oh, I was such a fool, but you saved me from becoming a disgrace And now I know my rightful place So baby use me, 'cause using me will help me to save face

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.375
Weighted score: 5.638736
Overall Rank: 2162
Posted: December 11, 2003 1:08 PM PST; Last modified: December 11, 2003 1:08 PM PST
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Comments:
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 | 11-Dec-03/2:44 PM | Reply
Splooge, nappy, overflowing in the trash can.
[n/a] dragonfly @ 67.192.110.189 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 11-Dec-03/3:44 PM | Reply
You know you'll be singing it in the shower. = P
[7] Caducus @ 195.92.168.166 | 12-Dec-03/2:01 PM | Reply
Loved the opening but s2 ruined the feeling - damn ! You have potential and i'd love to see a more concise version. If you open as strongly as this you must close as strong (or more) 7
[n/a] dragonfly @ 65.234.234.150 > Caducus | 12-Dec-03/10:33 PM | Reply
I see what you mean. I think I'll work on it when I get in another bad mood.
[8] The_Third_Isis @ 68.5.128.151 | 13-Dec-03/12:43 AM | Reply
Aheeemm..My brother sat me right down and he talked to me ,"about all this use me stuff" I sayd brother if y
you only knew if it feeeeels this good getting used..
you know the rest of this song...let me feeel why tough you are letting this s.o.b.use you up and how goood it feeels to you child...are you with me* 8.
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