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Self-Rebellion, revised (Free verse) by emilyowey
Lethal highway up and down my back. The center can be trusted? Everything is infected. Controlled by the offender, the enemy. The center, the basis, the electricity Beautiful surges, sparks of the lies Knows of his flaws, knows of his strengths Knows everything, or will Circuits spread like wildfire, beneath, inside my skin. Chilling, ruling, using me. I try to keep him all inside. My only defence, the silence. But he knows I'm ephemeral, While he will always be. He doesn't feel the pain. To him the knives are soothing. To him the drugs are life. Escape is where he controls all, Where he is paramount.

Up the ladder: here now today
Down the ladder: life sucks sometimes..ditto

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8535
Posted: August 5, 2002 9:32 PM PDT; Last modified: August 7, 2002 12:15 AM PDT
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[6] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 6-Aug-02/7:27 AM | Reply
you had me, up until 'evil plans'. then, it fell apart for me. a 6 for you: 100% for the first half, and a pittance for the rest.
[8] darby pyn @ 64.12.96.46 | 8-Sep-02/4:14 PM | Reply
great energy. you use your disapointment well.
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