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I AM...

Member since 2003 · Posted 16 Nov 2003 · 4 comments

NEVER ENDING I AM LIKE THE STARS IN THE SKY THE WATER IN THE SEAS THE SEASONS OF A YEAR LIKE THE LEAVES ON A TREE. UNIQUE LIKE EVERYONE STRONG LIKE EVERYTHING I AM. I AM THE VISION THAT I SEE I AM THE SOUND THAT I HEAR I AM THE TOUCH THAT I FEEL I AM THE VIOCE THAT I SING, WHO CAN DEFINE ME ARE PEOPLE WHO DO NOT KNOW WHO CANNOT UNDERSTAND ME ARE PEOPLE WHO I DON'T KNOW. FOR EVER WILL IT BE I MAY NEVER KNOW FOR EVERYTHING IS A MYSTERY, AN ENDING STORY. I AM THE STAR, I AM THE DROP I AM THE SEASON, I AM THE LEAVES; DEFINITE IN CERTAIN WAYS WHICH MAKE THEM WHAT THEY ARE BUT DIFFERENT FOR ALL THE WAYS THAT ARE.

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[8] ShaNoN+960317485 16-Nov-03/6:11 AM Reply

"THE SEASONS OF A YEAR" is finite - 04in most cases but down here in Maldives its 02; but liked the idea behind it
Second of all get a word processor:o) cause "I AM THE VIOCE THAT I SING" - ring any bells, or should i underline it for you.
All in all its worth a 8from this heathen, cause I AM...
TKAE IT AND BE DNOE WTIH IT:o)

[7] Shuushin 16-Nov-03/7:24 AM Reply

STOP THE SHOUTING.

horrey cow. The last three lines gel very nicely, but I can't help thinking there's a more forceful way to make this case.

Most of the power is lost in heat (as is often the case).

It almost pushes through though...

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[6] INTRANSIT 16-Nov-03/9:52 AM Reply

yes, no need to shout. 6. show more/ tell less. create some new meatphors.

[10] Shardik 16-Nov-03/4:33 PM Reply

The funniest read EVER! 10.