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I AM... (Free verse) by CHUNMOON NEVER ENDING I AM
LIKE THE STARS IN THE SKY
THE WATER IN THE SEAS
THE SEASONS OF A YEAR
LIKE THE LEAVES ON A TREE.
UNIQUE LIKE EVERYONE
STRONG LIKE EVERYTHING
I AM.
I AM THE VISION THAT I SEE
I AM THE SOUND THAT I HEAR
I AM THE TOUCH THAT I FEEL
I AM THE VIOCE THAT I SING,
WHO CAN DEFINE ME ARE PEOPLE WHO
DO NOT KNOW
WHO CANNOT UNDERSTAND ME ARE PEOPLE
WHO I DON'T KNOW.
FOR EVER WILL IT BE
I MAY NEVER KNOW
FOR EVERYTHING IS A MYSTERY,
AN ENDING STORY.
I AM THE STAR, I AM THE DROP
I AM THE SEASON, I AM THE LEAVES;
DEFINITE IN CERTAIN WAYS
WHICH MAKE THEM WHAT THEY ARE
BUT DIFFERENT FOR ALL THE WAYS THAT ARE.
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Posted: November 16, 2003 3:16 AM PST; Last modified: November 16, 2003 3:16 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.4034123 Overall Rank: 3171 Comments:
STOP THE SHOUTING.
horrey cow. The last three lines gel very nicely, but I can't help thinking there's a more forceful way to make this case. Most of the power is lost in heat (as is often the case). It almost pushes through though... -7-
yes, no need to shout. 6. show more/ tell less. create some new meatphors.
The funniest read EVER! 10.
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Second of all get a word processor:o) cause "I AM THE VIOCE THAT I SING" - ring any bells, or should i underline it for you.
All in all its worth a 8from this heathen, cause I AM...
TKAE IT AND BE DNOE WTIH IT:o)