Heretic Haikus

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Nov 2003 · 3 comments

[the first set of haikus I've ever written] Slaves to dead symbols- but they can decide which ones they would rather fear. Righteous and quite proud, keeping everything hidden- scared to be naked. The truth sets you free; salvation is denial- so forgive yourself. Faith: a sad excuse to be happily naive- wanting more control They need to save me- before I undermine them while they are timid. Forgiveness? No way, I have forgiven myself- don't need Jesus now!

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[7] Shuushin 15-Nov-03/12:08 AM Reply

A nice conceptual run! and your first 'haiku'; good job. Too bad we don't have another classification for 5/7/5 poems.

try these as cinquain (2/4/6/8/2)
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[n/a] Don-Quixote › Shuushin 15-Nov-03/1:06 AM Reply

I think the best one was the last one.

cinquain eh? im trying everything nowadays, so sure- i'll probly do it one of these days.

[7] Shuushin › Don-Quixote 15-Nov-03/1:10 AM Reply

that and 3rd.

do a little research on adelaide crapsey for the scoop on cinquain - good stuff. Here's a good example:

"Triad"

These be
Three silent things:
The falling snow ... the hour
Before the dawn ... the mouth of one
Just dead.