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Heretic Haikus (Haiku) by SupremeDreamer
[the first set of haikus I've ever written] Slaves to dead symbols- but they can decide which ones they would rather fear. Righteous and quite proud, keeping everything hidden- scared to be naked. The truth sets you free; salvation is denial- so forgive yourself. Faith: a sad excuse to be happily naive- wanting more control They need to save me- before I undermine them while they are timid. Forgiveness? No way, I have forgiven myself- don't need Jesus now!

Up the ladder: sunrise at kofa
Down the ladder: Cold Turkey

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.1666665
Weighted score: 5.313765
Overall Rank: 3482
Posted: November 14, 2003 4:49 PM PST; Last modified: November 14, 2003 4:49 PM PST
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[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 15-Nov-03/12:08 AM | Reply
A nice conceptual run! and your first 'haiku'; good job. Too bad we don't have another classification for 5/7/5 poems.

try these as cinquain (2/4/6/8/2)
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[n/a] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.171.119 > Shuushin | 15-Nov-03/1:06 AM | Reply
I think the best one was the last one.

cinquain eh? im trying everything nowadays, so sure- i'll probly do it one of these days.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Don-Quixote | 15-Nov-03/1:10 AM | Reply
that and 3rd.

do a little research on adelaide crapsey for the scoop on cinquain - good stuff. Here's a good example:

"Triad"

These be
Three silent things:
The falling snow ... the hour
Before the dawn ... the mouth of one
Just dead.
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