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Burn for Her (Free verse) by josiefiend
Tell me, How does one love a fire? How can you caress it without being burned, Without being consumed by its eager heat? A kiss would blacken and blister parched lips, And flames would flicker and flinch At every gentle touch, and sweet breath, Fanning them to greater consumption. Doesn’t the heart singe and scar with the abuse? The flesh of man cannot brush tears of ash From the transparent blush of fiery cheeks, Could never ease the destructive hunger. Though would you not be enraptured By the ravishing, red glow, Blissfully hypnotized? Perhaps you would abandon all else, And throw yourself to the flames, Melting into the fire As so much sweet, life-sustaining fuel. Tell me, Would you burn for her?

Up the ladder: ?{……..}?
Down the ladder: Marriage

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.4
Weighted score: 5.0476813
Overall Rank: 6897
Posted: October 30, 2003 2:47 PM PST; Last modified: October 30, 2003 2:47 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] richa @ 81.86.79.115 | 30-Oct-03/3:19 PM | Reply
the subject choice is not original; love fire/fire burns.

But nevertheless I think you writing has quite a lively voice, though somewhat archaic.
[7] baphomet @ 24.126.116.54 | 30-Oct-03/4:40 PM | Reply
G
good
but generic
still good.
[4] titan69 @ 62.31.23.63 | 1-Nov-03/12:31 PM | Reply
On a hot summers night would you offer your throat to
the wolf with the red roses!!!!!
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