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Confused (Free verse) by justjay
Closing in. A touch close at hand. Feeling her mind, through my heart. Seeing the inner beauty in her eyes. My heart skips a beat. I feel I have gotten to close- to fast. Scared you off. I know there was something, cuz you pushed me away. It all happened so fast. We met- We talked- We played a strong game with our hearts. I lost. You may not have ever known, but i did. I hurt and you moved on. Where to go from nothing? How can I stand next to you; And not be moved by you? The control you had over me, still lives. I have to move on, but i can't. I will see you always. What should I think? What should I feel? Maybe I'll never know. . .

Up the ladder: The Muse
Down the ladder: a gin blossom blossoms

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10214
Posted: August 10, 2003 1:09 PM PDT; Last modified: August 10, 2003 1:09 PM PDT
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[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 11-Aug-03/2:39 AM | Reply
Okay Buster lets get to it.

First off you can do this because your writing is concise but the poetry just isn't there. All you need to do is 'do time' on poemranker learn from the Yoda's and find your identity.

Use the force
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