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Free verse № 60110

Confused

Member since 2003 · Posted 10 Aug 2003 · 1 comment

Closing in. A touch close at hand. Feeling her mind, through my heart. Seeing the inner beauty in her eyes. My heart skips a beat. I feel I have gotten to close- to fast. Scared you off. I know there was something, cuz you pushed me away. It all happened so fast. We met- We talked- We played a strong game with our hearts. I lost. You may not have ever known, but i did. I hurt and you moved on. Where to go from nothing? How can I stand next to you; And not be moved by you? The control you had over me, still lives. I have to move on, but i can't. I will see you always. What should I think? What should I feel? Maybe I'll never know. . .

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[n/a] Caducus 11-Aug-03/2:39 AM Reply
Okay Buster lets get to it.

First off you can do this because your writing is concise but the poetry just isn't there. All you need to do is 'do time' on poemranker learn from the Yoda's and find your identity.

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