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Haiku (Other) by heart Pre-defined, imprisoned-rigid cadence,
Sparsely worded, sets the stage before the final turning,
You will never see iambic haiku.
Up the ladder:
Mrs. Robinson
Down the ladder:
Everything Has Changed
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Posted: October 8, 2002 7:58 PM PDT; Last modified: October 8, 2002 8:54 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9437647 Overall Rank: 9016 Comments:
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9-Oct-02/8:32 AM
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would be better if the first line had more 'rigid cadence'.
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heart @ 12.237.122.66
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10-Aug-03/10:46 PM
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Yep. Thanks for the feedback.
...I don't think this counts as haiku, does it? The lines are too long. But I like how it's self-referential and a bit ironic.
No, the poem isn't a Haiku (the style is listed as Other). The poem's title is Haiku, but that's a reference to the subject of the poem; I didn't mean it to literally describe the style. If you count syllables, you might notice a relation to Haiku of sorts, but since it's nearly iambic, the syllable counts had to be even numbers.
Oh, I see; I thought the title meant it was a haiku, rather than a comment on the haiku style. I like it, then.
ok
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