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Jasmine (Free verse) by A. Nomaly
Tea and hot water, bikini tops in metallic colors, wanting to fall because it be fun, space and time joints bend like knees on stair, hand rail now clean can be slid down without fear I cleaned it myself. The maid is sharing her skills with her clients. They did not ask for it.

Up the ladder: My Toes
Down the ladder: screener

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.0
Weighted score: 5.1897035
Overall Rank: 4759
Posted: April 6, 2009 6:47 PM PDT; Last modified: April 6, 2009 6:47 PM PDT
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[9] http://mulberryfairy @ 70.16.67.83 | 5-May-09/6:56 PM | Reply
I like the placement of your punctuation- how it makes each phrase part of the line and part of a more complete thought with their different meanings.
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