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Taste of Ash (A long project barely beginning) (Lyric) by sliver
I want to find a fire, The kind that won't burn out. While these ashes in my mouth, Keep my lifeblood from running out. I want to live like a moth, Who sets his eyes upon the sun, That much should be apparent Because it's exactly what I've done. I've lived loved and tasted, I've been burnt, cut, and I've bled. But I've never truly savored, These affections that I dread.

Up the ladder: Peter
Down the ladder: fish dish

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 8115
Posted: March 2, 2007 6:46 PM PST; Last modified: April 11, 2007 8:07 PM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 208.127.90.245 | 2-Mar-07/8:57 PM | Reply
First 2 lines are good. Then it runs amok, without more to go on.
[n/a] Bethy @ 165.154.46.45 | 3-Mar-07/3:28 AM | Reply
Is this about life...longevity...spontanious combustion...without an inner fire, one could fizzel out...??? This is what I got from your lyrics...am I anywhere close? I'll vote later... :) Bethy
[n/a] sliver @ 209.248.115.61 > Bethy | 11-Apr-07/8:09 PM | Reply
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