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Looking Up (Other) by Verse2Verse
Gracefully drifting through holes left in reason Delicately dancing down to taste every season I'll watch you sun, you'll warm my face I wish I could offer something, something other than space. As your beams float down, a thick border of light midst shade The freedom to pick up and run, guided by the option to stay The gift of the world lies solely complete Whether the chill of the winter, or the mid-summers heat. Though sometimes the rain can fall so hard It's drops; the weight of the world Sometimes it's saddening sheets of spray Seem to overflow the curb. It cannot go on forever No matter what they say As long as I can take a breath I can wait until that day. So when it gets bad, I know it could be worse When the faces that we chase always seem to submerge In the darkness and the hate, in which we create Leaving shells of their souls on the side to waste. Please warm my face, that's all I ask On those days of pain which cannot last I know myself and I know what is true To warm my face, is all I ask of you

Up the ladder: THINK ABOUT ME
Down the ladder: Kansas City

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8661
Posted: September 26, 2005 11:56 AM PDT; Last modified: September 26, 2005 11:56 AM PDT
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[8] cyan9 @ 62.253.128.14 | 26-Sep-05/12:45 PM | Reply
Gentle, moody and contemplatative (a very nice combination) - there is sufficient thought within the first paragraphs to force me to ask where I can read more of your work (a rarity). I would say I lost the thread a bit in the middle verse though, but was so enchanted by the end of the second verse that I quickly glanced over that.
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