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smoke is rising (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1
smoke is rising, screams are heard
flames are high, risks are taken
choking on air, help me, they cry.
heros are below, taking their own lives
saving the helpless
cought up and overwhelmed, we are like
the helpless in the flames
screaming to get out of our lives
to be saved by our heros.
when your choking and dying in the flames
run the obstacles set before you
persever and most of all, love whatever you doing..
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Arithmetic Mean: 2.5
Weighted score: 4.8814354
Overall Rank: 9985
Posted: August 28, 2005 6:46 PM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2005 6:46 PM PDT
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Work on the puncuation, it would help it to read better.