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Love shall set you free (Free verse) by stacylynn_3
I am surrounded by walls, no one can hear my desperate calls. I scream with all my might, but it remains silent in the lonely night my eyes begin to tear, but still no one can hear. I am trapped, left without any hope, so i sit, and begin to mope. My aggravation leaves welts, the depression never melts. This is were i remain, suffering in so much pain. The only way to get out, is if he comes about. Only he can release me. because love shall set you free.

Up the ladder: Mind of One
Down the ladder: Strings and Sinews

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10279
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 17, 2005 12:21 PM PDT
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[n/a] deleted user @ 81.69.23.196 | 17-May-05/4:07 PM | Reply
The AABB rhyme has a disastrous effect on story & mood but if you really insist on this sequence, at least chop up the verse into eight stanza's.

Watching a few good slasher movies could also improve on your poetic imagination. 'I scream with all my might', but the poem's tone is hardly more than a mumble.
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