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Grasping Smoke (Free verse) by Luzr
Cry and be done with it, damn it
Holding onto smoke is tricky
Of course the vacuum of mind,
Would manage to get it perfect
Sealed tight in pockets
Lined with gray matter and glass
Exhale and remember how to breathe, damn it
Before you choke tonight
Holding onto smoke
Mirrors should sing the sonnets
Of reckless pipe dreams
Buried beneath practiced smiles
Steady your shaking hands, damn it
You knew you couldn't hold this
Desperate, you've forgotten that this burns
Even with time machines and what you know now
You wouldn't last a minute, look in a mirror
Clutching onto smoke, has worn you down
Close your eyes and rest for once, damn it
The dark bags telling of your slow decay
You look like you've returned from a fist fight
A little worse for wear, I pray it was to the death
Because otherwise, I'd never believe
That you got the other guy at all
Let go and lay down, damn it
You had it and you lost it
Nothing more to tell, so give it a rest
Light up a cancer, and lean back
Relax damn it, you've lost
Smoke wasn't meant to be held
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.2980075
Overall Rank: 3702
Posted: April 12, 2005 9:01 AM PDT; Last modified: April 12, 2005 9:01 AM PDT
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That would turn me off so hard that by the tenth ten I doubt I would even be able to make eye contact any more.
That said, this is pretty decent pome, even though I'm a rabid anti-smoker. Though I do occasionally imbibe smoke in it's more expensive liquid form.