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cacoon (Free verse) by whispern_smoke_wisp
I feel like I should be wrapped in a white silk cacoon, for a year. Trapped by myself with nothing, but my mind and white silk, to entertain my thoughts. the pureness that surrounds me will become me easing all my evil thoughts away. And when I step out blinking into the warm afternoon light 365 days later, my large and delicate wings will carry me to the sun.

Up the ladder: merry-go-round
Down the ladder: Snow Sucks

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.25
Weighted score: 5.029801
Overall Rank: 7349
Posted: April 2, 2005 10:01 AM PST; Last modified: April 2, 2005 10:01 AM PST
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[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.224.24.176 | 2-Apr-05/11:31 PM | Reply
You have potential. -7-
[8] zodiac @ 212.118.19.51 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 3-Apr-05/3:58 AM | Reply
She misspelled cocoon.
[7] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 4.225.154.152 > zodiac | 3-Apr-05/10:59 AM | Reply
Even so, look at the other My_Name_Looks_Like_This writers. This at least has one image with meaning i.e. white silk/purity. How many others of the 15 year old My_Name_Looks_Like_This writers even come close to writing something that isn't a pimple marked free verse?

<3 Jason
thankyou
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