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Spotty Sun (Free verse) by Blindpoetry
The sun's so spotty Lemon faucets and Onions win the Golden-Spangled Action Game We call love the anti Drug and depressed Forgetting how to sin Love and fruitful is I smell babe and Ruth as my temptation I smell faith and Truth as my deception Crouching under the arms Of my couch, sofa, supreme Agents searching for an Answer is no where Who's that clue? He's in your direction Who's that estate? She's in your destination Casting spells and Queuing you into a Play over here with a Spotty sun, find shade

Up the ladder: sometimes i wish
Down the ladder: With a pithy stroke

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.6666667
Weighted score: 4.72186
Overall Rank: 11924
Posted: December 26, 2004 11:46 AM PST; Last modified: December 26, 2004 11:46 AM PST
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[8] Bhaskaryya @ | 27-Dec-04/9:16 PM | Reply
I don't really follow it well. The weaving of words, though not overly complicated, seems a bit confusing.
Can't say I like it, neither do I hate it.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ > Bhaskaryya | 27-Dec-04/9:29 PM | Reply
Trying not to sound like an overlord or some type of god that knows everything and/or knows how to make weird things - i made it choppy on purpose...becuase. it was fun and i sortof wanted to impact different kinds of subjects in each stanza.

Me explaining each stanza would sort of kill the poem, in my eyes.

blahblahblahblahbalh hope that helps i guess.
once again, blahablhablhablhablah
[8] Bhaskaryya @ > Blindpoetry | 27-Dec-04/9:43 PM | Reply
Blah Blah really helps. Now I understand the poem better. *Wish I could vote again*.

Happy New Year.

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