there's no way out

Member since 2004 · Posted 22 Dec 2004 · 5 comments

i'm weary of tracing the path worn thin by maybe next times and begin agains now a ditch dug deep with faults stacked high in comforting darkness with forgotten sky superficially close to brightness of light stumbling in shadows shaking with fright i pause and wonder how could i rewind and choose a path that would be more kind when i'm eight feet down and i've dug my grave my closet is empty and cadavers hold the spade there's no way out

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5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

5 comments

[6] Bhaskaryya 22-Dec-04/11:57 PM Reply

Not bad!! But what does AGAINS mean??

[5] Dovina › Bhaskaryya 23-Dec-04/1:14 PM Reply

begin-agains

[10] Yikes 23-Dec-04/10:08 AM Reply

Quite melancholy. You've done a great job at holding the tone of this piece. Also, the descriptions were phenominal. 10, bravo.

[5] Dovina 23-Dec-04/1:15 PM Reply

More kind to whom?

[n/a] oneglove › Dovina 25-Dec-04/10:48 PM Reply

well, more kind to me. and only a 5 this time? where did i go so wrong?