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One-Man Act (Free verse) by Blindpoetry
Your sun may shine as my does as well Your attitude may be horrendously happy As mine loves to, also And your head might be washed Mine is too But life is better when your loves are bright Yours are dark and egotistically bite My sun shines down upon my life As yours is a spotlight for your one-man act Die tonight and you'll hope that everyone mourns Die tonight and find balloons floating.. floating And the death of me will be sad, but not as a fantasy And yours may be horrible, but you wanted it that way Death to all of us if we so little think tragic things As our toys and things that make us happy Which means your life is ending and you enjoy it all As long as we're all sad, depressed, angry and diabolical Your life is happy; You love the depressed

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.7615943
Overall Rank: 11610
Posted: December 16, 2004 8:21 PM PST; Last modified: December 16, 2004 8:21 PM PST
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[4] Bhaskaryya @ 212.162.192.165 | 21-Dec-04/10:53 PM | Reply
Nah, I don't really like it. Doesn't flow too well and not too poetic either. A 4 for your efforts though.
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