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Paris, 1934 (Sonnet) by Fear of Garbage
To see a death of purple curling leaves Is murder, grave, my strange and lovely core. The carbon lights are scratching paper sleeves, Are drunken voice, empty heart and open sore. To see the city lights and Gothic shapes, The lines and robes that roll like engine head. How strange the lovely hand that cuts the grapes, Her body, name and wrist as black as lead. To see the hungry mouths of scaring crows Who bite the hands of burning tower tips. The quiet carbon songs of eaten boughs Are eyes of trees and necks of lips. To settle, marsh of flame and air and foam Is mute; It's never, never coming home.

Up the ladder: Grass Stains
Down the ladder: Take My Chances

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.357609
Overall Rank: 3369
Posted: October 18, 2004 5:18 PM PDT; Last modified: October 18, 2004 5:18 PM PDT
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[10] Goad @ 217.95.209.144 | 23-Jan-05/10:07 AM | Reply
jesus you are ungodly. I hate you you presumptious fucking little git.

cleverly overloaded words, syncopation with sibillants in opposition to b's and k's, impeccable rhyming, tantalizing inner rhymes. deliberate odd word combinations that force the mind to construct images and meaning that soars beyond the sparse construction. This is how I used to imagine writing (when I was young and gave a fuck) but never actually could.

I hate you I hate you I hate you.

P.S. Never stop writing.
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