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The Death of Love (Free verse) by donmiguel1960
It destroys me to love you The misery seems to be infinite Why is this essential? With permission, may I please just not care? Granted the permission I could not stop Why am I forced to love you? How is this possible? I know I do because you hurt me so much I don’t think I like you I hate who I am when I’m with you You are better without me But I’m in love with you Unable to make sense No logic to this cause No lesson can be brought forth And I can’t picture breathing without you

Up the ladder: I Should Have Jumped
Down the ladder: Wondering

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Arithmetic Mean: 1.0
Weighted score: 4.8102965
Overall Rank: 10955
Posted: June 28, 2004 4:36 PM PDT; Last modified: June 28, 2004 9:47 PM PDT
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[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 | 28-Jun-04/5:25 PM | Reply
really aught to reword that "whom" line, even if it is correct it is awkward in this context, imho.

Not crazy about breathing devoid, either - sorry.

[n/a] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 > Shuushin | 28-Jun-04/5:26 PM | Reply
How is he supposed to take your suggestion seriously when you've used the archaism 'aught' instead of the correct word, 'ought'?
[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 > zodiac | 28-Jun-04/5:55 PM | Reply
I don't know Zodiac, how?

You and your riddles.
[n/a] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 > Shuushin | 29-Jun-04/9:55 PM | Reply
By being a colossal boob.

Checkmate. Cast down ye cutlasses and avast.
[7] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 > zodiac | 30-Jun-04/5:02 AM | Reply
feels more like I'm being boarded by the parrot...

Here - have a cracker, cracker.
[n/a] donmiguel1960 @ 68.96.168.211 > Shuushin | 28-Jun-04/9:47 PM | Reply
I like your suggestion, i'm changing it
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