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Frozen Soul (Free verse) by TLRufener
The darkness of the night Has chilled my soul. No one can hear me Because I am alone. Hot steaming tears Have stained my face. The world rushed by me At an intense pace. I couldn’t keep up With all the worries and fuss, So I was cast off the road; Thrown into the dust. My heart has been broken For the final time. Tonight is the night That will end my life. I don’t know where I’m going Since I cannot see; These hot steamy tears Are blocking the scene. I wipe them away As the stars disappear. Everything rushes by In a blurry smear. A shadow comes over me As you cross my way. I crash into your arms And you know what I’m going to say. "Take me away; I want to die. I don’t want anymore pain. I no longer want to cry. The world is just too hard, I can’t possibly make it through. Take me away from this place. I want to be like you." I cried tears of anger. I sobbed whimpers of pain. You held me closely in your arms And shielded me from the rain. You slowly rocked me back and forth; Then you softly kissed my cheek. Trying to relieve all of my fears You gave the truth to me. "Don’t cry my precious child The world is not that bad. Take a good look around At everything you have. You can watch the sunrise And take walks on the beach. You have friends who still care for you, And your dreams can still be reached. Do you really want to give that up? Don’t you want to try? You’ll never have another chance; Not if you die." You cradled me As I continued to cry. Your words changed nothing. I still want to die. I want to leave But the world won’t let me go. You are the only one Who can free my frozen soul. You take you hand gently And run your fingers through my hair. I’ve had as much as I can take And now I just don’t care. You gave me one last kiss. Just a quick little peck; Then with all your greatest care You quickly broke my neck. You couldn’t bear to see me Suffer for eternity. So you gave me all your love, And set my frozen soul free.

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.928861
Overall Rank: 9203
Posted: June 20, 2004 7:35 PM PDT; Last modified: June 20, 2004 7:35 PM PDT
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[7] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 20-Jun-04/8:16 PM | Reply
I don't like about suicide, but if it helps you to cope, then okay. Some redundancies could be omitted like, "The world rushed by me / At an intense pace," as one example. "You quickly broke my neck" was a surprise.


[n/a] TLRufener @ 24.158.7.169 > Dovina | 20-Jun-04/8:21 PM | Reply
This poem was written for a friend of mine. After she told about her suicide attempt.
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